Peer Critique of Ethical design in the Internet of Things (Baldini et. al, 2015)
The article addresses the ethical dilemmas of privacy and user empowerment that occur in the usage of IoT. A framework to solve these dilemmas utilizing ethically designed IT systems is suggested based on the toolkit “SecKit” that empowers users to profile their own privacy settings.
The others do not use many divisions in the structure, which makes the article seem somewhat massive and slightly messy at times. Not dividing the text into sections also deemphasizes the important points that are made. The language is academic and professional with appropriate amount of professional terminology, however, the sentences become very long and complicated, which unfortunately again deemphasizes the focal points of the text. Splitting up the sentences or killing superfluous parts could simplify the text and emphasize the important points.
As the article moves on, the style of writing goes from essay genre to a more technical instructive text with many terms that is not understandable for a layperson. This shift in style confuses the reader and poses question of who is the intended audience. Initially the text seems to address academics of various disciplines, which then changes to mostly professional developers as the text proceeds to describe of how to model an ethical design using the “SecKit” toolkit. However, the usage of metatext between each section becomes very useful to understand the intention despite the confusion of intention.
The language of the text is clear with precise wording and well-defined terminology. Yet, the authors tend to use the same word to start many sentences in a row. An example of this is evident in the conclusion where they use the word “we” to initiate their arguments;
“We have identified…” “Then, we have described…” “We have shown…” “We have also described…” (Baldini et. al, 2015: no page numbers in article). This choice of repetitive wording as such makes the text less appealing to read. Nevertheless, the article does give a clear answer to how IT systems can empower the user by utilizing the ethical design framework.