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The paper introduces Internet of Things in relation to data privacy, elucidating the new security aspects, which emerge with the expansion of the Internet into IoT networks. The paper lists the challenges connected to the expansion of IoT and the implications these have for the user. The introduction to IoT is a segue into presenting possible solutions for the challenges posed.

We are then introduced to the concept of Ethical Design, which encourages the user to interact with IoT, so to interconnect user and IoT. The concept of Ethical Design is further elaborated through an example of a policy-based framework called SecKit, which provides the user with more power over and insight into their data and the complexity of the IoT network.

The SecKit framework support users in securing their interaction with IoT; a combination of the SecKit framework and existing laws and regulations ensures this.

Throughout the paper there are references to other reports or scientific papers, they are placed within the text as a way for readers to navigate to the information, for example, “For specific privacy aspects, see Heurix et al. (2015) for a taxonomy of privacy enhancing technologies. “ (Baldini, 2016, p.12)

However, these references are placed in a way, which disturbs the flow and forces the reader to consider whether this is important information. These should be placed in footnotes to not disturb the flow of reading and allow the reader to return to the information later on.

Another aspect which disturbs the flow of reading is the fact that Baldini et al. uses Latin words where English would be satisfactory, an example of this: “…inter alia includes requirements for facilitating easy access…”(Baldini et al., 2016, p.4). Inter Alia could easily be replaced by the English phrase ‘among other things’.

Lastly, I would like to touch upon the notion of implicit knowledge in the paper, specifically in the last section on ‘Policy Based Approach on Ethical Design’; we are presented with the term ‘Graphical User Interface’ (p 16), a technical software term, which Baldini et al. fails to explain. Furthermore, the word is shortened to GUI and is not written out again. As mentioned in the book ‘Elements of Style’, Strunk and White (1920) encourages the writer to not take shortcuts at the cost of clarity, meaning that until the reader is acquainted with the word, the writer should refrain from abbreviations. As this is a scientific paper, we expect this from the writer, however, I believe that the reader is better equipped to navigate the more technical part of the paper had this part been elaborated upon.

 

 

 

 

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